tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3383507675225996666.post2737937638136052497..comments2020-10-05T11:20:29.309-04:00Comments on Sundry Verities: Anger poemjfillehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17196329082003121004noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3383507675225996666.post-65298541939963288152011-01-04T13:02:56.013-05:002011-01-04T13:02:56.013-05:00For what it's worth, the last stanza had me sq...For what it's worth, the last stanza had me squirming for sure; in that sense, it's effective for me. But I can also see her point. Perhaps to diffuse things a bit, you might draw the reader's focus to the effect of Achilles' anger...à la http://jfille.blogspot.com/2010/12/winter-break.html, specifically the excerpt below.<br /><br />"The words do the same thing. They take possession of my tongue and spray out into the kitchen or the living room. Sometimes they collide with someone's face. Sometimes they look like tears when they land on skin."Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17646832446568298920noreply@blogger.com